My trip to America
America, the country where dreams comes true, ”the land of the free". I had been dreaming about America since I was a teenager. And, in 2009 when I had the opportunity to come here to the US, it didn’t take me so long to say “Yes”.Now after almost 2 and half years of living in America, I still remember my trip to America.
It was a sunny day in November 2009, when I woke up that morning I had strange feeling, it was like at the same time a very good feeling of happiness because I was about to leave my country and chase my dream to America, but at the same time it was a sad feeling because I had to leave my brother there. After I drank my coffee, me, my brother and my best friend were heading to the Henri Coanda International Airport in Bucharest. After an almost 2 hours driving we got there.
Before checking in I said goodbye to my brother and to my best friend and I promised them that I will see them soon. I remember that when I bought my ticket I was looking for a window seat, which I got. The flight to America was very long, about 14 hours, but we had a 1 hour stop in Germany. I couldn’t sleep at all, the whole flight I watched movies and listened music. I used to fly before but I never felt the same like now,maybe because it was something different.Even the situation was different, before I use to fly for fun, but now it was for a new begging, a new life.
Finally, after a 14 hours flight we arrived In Chicago. It was about 9 o’clock and I remember that because, before landing I was watching the window and I was wowed about that great view. All those huge buildings, the big highways and beautiful houses.After I picking up my baggage, I saw my mom and I ran to her; I was so happy to see her again after so long, almost 5 years.
In conclusion, I had a very good trip with no incidents, all the flight attendants were so nice and polite, the food was good and I had a great time; I could say that I enjoyed my trip to America.
Good job Alin. A few suggestions. I think the first line of the 2nd paragraph should have been the thesis statement in the introduction. At the moment your intro makes me think your essay is about your decision. The third para about the flight could be developed a bit more, what did you do on the flight, how did you feel? And finally the end of the conclusion could have a better final sentence.
ReplyDeleteAll in all though, a good effort. We'll talk on Saturday about the grammar mistakes.
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